“If you’re silent for a long time, people just arrive in your mind.” --Alice Walker
With your first few lines, you are inviting your readers into the lives of your characters. You want your readers to feel as if they’re eavesdropping and somehow getting privileged information that no one else has. You’re allowing them to sneak into the house with you --to hide in the corner or to be a fly on the wall.
Now you as the writer need to be the fly on that wall. Listen to your characters. What are they saying to each other? Are they angry? Afraid? --Maybe even terrified? And, of course, ask yourself why?
What are your characters worried about? Has someone in the room caused those worries?
What does your character truly care about? It has to at some point in the story seem almost unattainable. Almost.
I leave you today with a quote from Rabbi Nachman of Bratslav: “Many people believe that stories are told to put people to sleep. I tell mine to wake them up.”